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Tuesday, March 27, 2012

Brownie

Ankita would often go over to her neighbour's house after school until her parents got home from work. While there, she would play video games and watch tv.Her neighbor would leave her with their son Akash who was cute but had a little extra pounds to his body and a nice Goatie beard. As she grew up she started to see him very rarely as her parents asked her to go for tutions and competitive classes.But anjali had begun to think of akash as more than a neighbor and would dream about him as her prince charming with a shining Armour and on a white horse.

Anjali would often drive over to his house to drop things off and would often ask for his textbooks , as now they had moved away from where she lived. So one day she went to his house and dropped off the stuff.They talked for half an hour about life, and school. She was constantly amazed at how cute Akash was.She was wearing her favorite red kurti with blue jeans and looked quite pretty. Before she left she told akash that they had to see each other more often to catch up on more things.

They kept meeting every day but sooner than later anjali thought that she would just tell him her feelings for him. So about 2 weeks later and she told her mom that she was going to the movies. So they got to his house and  they started talking about school ans stuff. Anjali told him that they needed to talk about something private. She got her courage collected and sat on the couch beside him. She told him "that i have known u since i was about 6 and now as i am getting older, I am starting to see u in a different way. he asked her what way.............? she replied "that since childhood , i have dreamt of having a prince charming like u.....". She paused and then said "I Love you".... Akash was not 100% sure what to say but he stood with anjali and talked in balcony for a while .

As they stood in balcony akash's  Neighbor Mrs Sharma saw them and asked akash If he could come downstairs and fix her car as It was not getting started.Akash noded his head and went downstairs ,Anjali remembered that she was the same Mrs Sharma , who would never let them play and always used to scold them when they were kids.Kids used to hate her as she was always complaining about the noise children make , Anjali whispered come back soon Akash ...Akash Looked back and smiled.

After 5 minutes akash came back and said they should talk in the bedroom since nobody is here and people might disturb them in the balcony.As they walked to the back of the house,Akash told her how he hated Mrs Sharma. In the room,they sat down and there was a silence. Akash again broke the silence and said he also likes her.So Anjali took the opportunity and planted her lips on his . It was great to finally have her dream come true.Even while kissing she was thinking how lucky she was to get her dream man with her.Then he took off his shirt anjali was surprised but carried on hugging him.They began to play the love game and she was getting highly aroused.With in Minutes the new black T shirt she wore was being licked by Akash,She found it a little awkward but Akash played with her T shirt and tore it with his teeth.She then took control of her and finished off with some kissing and hugging.Akash then exploded all over her cheeks and licked it.She was so happy.They then had a quick pause before they got up and watched tv for a couple hours cuddling.

It was late now , she had to leave .Quickly they both dressed up and she moved out of the apartment not before a long good bye kiss.As soon as she got out her eyes could not believe what she saw.Shewas shocked to see Mrs Sharma Smiling as Akash was still trying to get the car started. She turned back to see who was with her ,It was Brownie , Mrs Sharma's Little pet dog...Anjali's face was so pale by now, her body so became weightless. She could barely stand up. She had heard the stories of Mrs Sharma Being a witch.She Fainted then and there.

PS : Written as a part of challenge bye "The Fool" from Indiblogger.I wish I had done justice !!!
PS2: This time your comments are really very Precious as its my first time taking a Challenge. 

14 comments:

  1. Nice attempt. Written a bit hurriedly though. Can see a few minor typos etc. Also I felt you could have given a bit more emotional depth. If you have opportunity do check our Dutch movie Miss Minoes

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    1. @the fool
      the feedback is very important.
      surely i ill try to improve.
      let me give a glance to "miss minoes"

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  2. So true Rahul... I loved the blog..!! :D It is my favourite topic of discussion. It's so true silence kills us and you don't want to talk when there is a great argument and the relationship is in stack! You sit staring at the floor like it might fall any moment..!! It's nerve wracking I tell you.. :/ I won't say my guy is weak if he cries come on! He's a human with emotions.. infact I have forced him to cry if he wants to.. crying is just another emotion and girls dont own it! It's because of the society! Very true.. Nice blog.. :)

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    1. @gayathri
      thanks a lot for the words !!
      yes crying is just another emotion , but guys cant do it publicly !!
      thats the way society is !!

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  3. good post. I enjoyed it...
    www.rajnishonline.blogspot.com

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  4. the last part was funny :P ... poor anjali!!

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  5. Hmm. The twist in the end felt a little hurried to me. I didn't understand why Mrs. Sharma would target Anjali, and in the middle you say Anjali had on a red kurti when she met Akash but by the end it was a black T shirt he was licking. And if he tore it with his teeth, what was she wearing when they decided to get dressed a little later?

    Just my two cents in the spirit of constructive criticism!

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    1. Dear SSK

      scene 1 ) Read carefully
      "She was wearing her favorite red kurti with blue jeans and looked quite pretty. Before she left she told akash that they had to see each other more often to catch up on more things."
      NOTE : she left in this scene !!

      Scene 2 :)Mrs sharma was a witch , who used to scold her from the childhood and in this scene she was wearing this black T shirt !!!

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  6. I agree with TF that you have written it in some hurry but I just loved the twist in the end. Good attempt. Btw quite a smart dog to know how to remove her tshirt ;)

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    1. ayush u and TF are right I have realized that !!!

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  7. too fast paced.. but a great attempt :)

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    1. yep i have heard that !! Thanks a lot !

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